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by thangngovan
(vietnam)


Hi everyone. I am a beginner in IELTS, and studying by myself because I have no condition to take a class. I will do IELTS in next 2 months, so I really need your help, specially in checking essay. Below is my first essay on leisure time, every comment is a helpful advice for me!


Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.


Leisure time is necessary for people after working and studying hard, and there are various recreation activities to do base on oneself purpose. Many people support the methods helping the mind getting better, while others endorse the thinking to rest in free time, but it is more effective if we take part in outside activities.

It is true that people can improve their personal ability by practicing pursuits improving the mind. By doing the word puzzles, this activity helps us raise the logical thinking and solve problems at work more effectively. On the other hand, we can wider our knowledge and absorb more information from many kind of books, the mental health will be better.

Standing at the other view, putting the mind at rest by enjoying media entertainment, people reduce the stress. After long day at work or school, we usually feel tired and need to relax. There are many channels such as watching films, listening music and playing games, our mind will balance again.

However, the pursuits of two sorts above have some disadvantages, such as we feel more stressful when practicing the mind or to be not conscious if using electronic entertaining methods, we should take outdoor actions. When enjoying outside events, for instance, doing exercise or playing sports bring about our physical health will be better, the mind will be refreshed and having energies for new works.

In summary, doing activities, improving our mind in leisure time will enhance our thinking but perhaps, also lead to feeling more stressful. Meanwhile, laying the mind to rest helping us reduce work’s pressure, however, we can feel graver. Personally, participating in outside pursuits is good for both metal and physical health.

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Pressure at Work and Time to Relax

by Mahesh Senadheera
(Sri Lanka)

Many people think that nowadays people are being subjected to more and more pressure in their work and thus are having less and less time to relax.

What is your opinion?


yes, it is true that people are having less time to relax as they are subjected to more pressure in their work. it has been the routine of the average man to wake up early in the morning, to leave the home for work, to work to dusk and return home late night. Thus it is reasonable to say that people are being subjected to pressure and they have no time even to dream of relax.

Due to the distance of the working place, a number of people find it difficult to reach there on time. So it is customory for them to leave the home early in the morning. To finish the daily course of the duty, they work as machines. Very often they fail to complete the duty of the day. The result is the amount of work on his shoulder is graduly climbing up. Consequently, intense of pressure is going up. Whether he is a government or prviate employ, this is the common situation. As a result, he has been deprived of his time to relax an refresh.

On the other hand, people in this ultra modern generation are engaging in a very hectic life style because of their personal needs. They have been helpless in the management of their time. Load of the work, duty of the personal and the social life is pressurizing them moment by moment. Unwillingly, duty of the family and children become agrave problem if they do the work for living properly and vice versa. It leaves them only pressure and stress.

According to the facts mentioned above, many people in the society today are being deprived of their time to be with the family members, to relax and refresh.

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Best Use of Leisure Time

by ahmet
(istanbul)

Please provide me with some feedback on my Leisure Time Essay.

Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles, other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time.

Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.


Many people believe that it is significant using spare time for things that enhance the mind, for instance reading and doing word puzzles. the others think that it is vital to relax the mind during spare time. In my opinion, I agree that people should use leisure time for activities which improve the mind.

On the one hand, some people have very exhausting job. Therefore, they would like to relax during leisure time, so they do not want to do anything within this time. They think they need to rest. Moreover, many people are lazy, for this reason they do not keen to do activities to improve the mind. For instance reading a book and doing Sudoku puzzles.

On the other hand, many people have stressful job too, but they would like to enhance the mind. Therefore, they do many things within leisure time. Such as reading a novel, solving puzzles, doing exercises which are useful for improving the mind. I think that people who utilize spare time doing activities that boost the mind are more successful than others who love to use spare time for relaxing.

Finally, in my opinion, people should use their leisure time to improve the mind. For this reason people should do anything which is useful for enhancing the mind. Moreover, I would argue that, people should hard working not to be idle. So they always doing something to be more successful. Furthermore, I think some activities are so relaxing while they improve the mind. Such as doing Sudoku puzzles.

In conclusion, I agree that people should do activities that improve the mind during leisure time. Because, while that they are performing activities for improving the mind, the activities can contribute to job achievement. Moreover, I think, leisure time should be used effectively since it is so precious.

Work Pressure and Leisure Time

by liv


Many people think that nowadays people are being subjected to more and more pressure in their work and thus are having less and less time to relax.

What is your opinion?


Today, almost all the people are declining their leisure time rather they are over occupied and concentrated working.

First reason is competition inside the work place. Some people are treasuring their job, which some might replace their position anytime due to jealousy and envy, so workers are devoting their full time in working. For example, a nurse supervisor does not want to return to become a ordinary nurse, in order to maintained her rank. She should do her best to protect her position. Second reason is like expenditures. Some people are busy working for two or three jobs in order to support unnecessary necessities in their life, such as buying brand new car, “beyond your means”, meaning in their life that the salary is not enough to support any expenses. This shows that people re occupied working because they need to pay their debt.

In my daily observation and opinion, workers should think that money is not all the matters for the reason that life is so short, which is why, as long as we still alive we need to enjoy whatever we have, in simple or extravagant way. Moreover, material things are easily can come and go and these things are not important in order to become happy. Giving importance of spending leisure time like going to watch cinema and visiting abroad so that we will feel happy.

I therefore conclude, life is go on, so we need to enjoy single moment of our family, friends and people that surrounds us, rather than having the work position with pressure and in the end, we miss the happiness in our life.

Work and Relaxation

by Long
(hong kong )

Many people think that nowadays people are being subjected to more and more pressure in their work and thus are having less and less time to relax.

What is your opinion?


Leisure time is essential in people's lives especially in this busy world, the valuable leisure time is getting less. However, people have different views on how to utilise their time. Some suggest to have mind improving activities yet the others believe resting is better. This essay will discuss on both sides of arguments.

Some people believe having brain stimulation by activities can help in children development. Young people usually learn academic knowledges from school. Other than traditional learning, reading novels or science fiction stimulate their imagination, having mini- games such as world puzzles, Sudoku can facilitate their logical thinking. Multiple players' activities also provide platform for building teamwork. people can fully utilise their recreational time in order to improve their intelligence, which is important to become competitive in this crucial society.

However, on the other hand, there are some strongly assert that resting is fundamental for leisure purpose. Nowadays, working over 50 hours a week is commonly seen elsewhere. Therefore, having such brain demanding activities after work or study would be a big burden to the participants. Instead, activities such as exercising, listening to music or even taking a nap would help recharging brain by simply resting. It is obvious that our brains require adequate rest to function in optimal level, people can concentrate on their works or learning after relaxation.

In my opinion, both sides have their meets. Resting is significant between working intervals, while mind improving games boost brain development. Hence, I suggest people should employ mind stimulating activities if mentally capable. if people who get fatigue from using brain, mild activities would be good options to recharge.

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Leisure Time and Study

by Orifjon
(Tashkent)

In some countries young people have little leisure time and are under a lot of pressure to work hard on their studies.

What do you think are the causes for this?

What solutions can you suggest?


From the perspective of history countries were divided into several levels according to their inner development and status. Nowadays current issue is still in trend. Basically, there are some countries where students study under pressure, not having time to relax or do some leisure activities. In this essay, major reasons and possible solutions will be outlined according to question above.

In my modest opinion, the basis of current issue lies in deep roots of education system of discussing countries. More clearly, governments -when planning the system - were now aware of students, who will then have to study following the government's system. Pattern of education was schemed involving positive sides only for governments rather than students. Some countries, for instance, are strictly critisized in planning the system compressed in order to spend less budget of organisation. This is, obviously, the most frightening way of objection of humanity's civil rights. One possible approach can be found in altering the way governments look at future of their own. In other words, the fact that proves that young generation is government's main stick point in the future should agitate them.

The second and the main reason, however, touches the field of schools, universities and other educational organisations. The difference between humankind and animals is only - human moral ability to fell and think. By this argument, students are not tend to feel moral help from educational institutions. 2/3 of all educational institutions forgot about "motivation", "inspiration" and "encouragement". In this cruel world all of humanity attempts to show his cruelty and violence. And from my strongest point of view, problem can be solved by encouraging students morally, to support and help by showing various ways that can withdraw out of harsh situations. Educational organisations should find out ways of innovative pedagogical methods. Only this way, problem of student pressure can be solved.

By way of conclusion, I find it necessary to reaffirm my point on altering the way governments and educational organisations see their future, otherwise serious problems can occur in society of ours.

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#1 (permalink) Tue Dec 03, 2013 11:34 am   Spending our free time - Please rate my essay 

Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that develop the mind, such as reading and doing crossword puzzles. Others feel that it is important to give one's mind a rest in leisure time. Discuss.

Relaxing our mind has been a vital part of spending our free time for thousands of years. Most of the people find relaxing activities like reading a book while others love to stay in the park, just see a boring TV channel or discuss with friends in front of a cup of tea or coffee. Even if maybe some persons will not totally agree with me, I consider that two of the most important activities that should eat our free time are the reading of a book and outdoor activities with family or friends.

Reading has always been one of the activities that fascinated the human mind and as long as we read books written in a language that we do not find difficult to understand, we should find reading a relaxing activity. Of course, as long as the books we are reading are not too technical to make us realize that we are not reading for fun but for study. For example I remember when my sister told me that by reading for relaxation she found God and that changed her life. She was reading mostly religious books.

Another activity which I personally consider that can have an important effect in our life are outdoor activities with family members or friends. This activities will help us be in a good shape for a long period of time and in the same time will help us develop strong close relationships with the persons we are spending our time with. And strong and close relationships are vital to have with people we would like to have around us for longer periods of time. For example I remember that we when I was younger I was going a lot for fishing with my father and over the years this activity become very important for us and made us to have have a very special relation.

In conclusion spending our time is very important and we should have a really clear idea between spending some time and loosing some time. I strongly believe that reading a book will help our mind and develop our vocabulary and when we have more time and weather is with us, spending some time outside with family or friends will help our relations. I just hope that less and less people will find important activities like playing computer games and watch television series.

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#2 (permalink) Tue Dec 03, 2013 16:10 pm   Re: Spending our free time - Please rate my essay 

Hi Xsimio, I thought your essay was very good. I especially liked your introduction and conclusion. You had some good personal and detailed examples, but I don't know if your first one was that convincing. Maybe you need to say more explicitly that even when we appear to be wasting time, those activities can have valuable results. Your writing was generally very clear, but you did have a lot of small errors in grammar and usage. Overall, I would rate this a 4 out of 5.

Xsimio wrote:
Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that develop the mind, such as reading and doing crossword puzzles. Others feel that it is important to give one's mind a rest in leisure time. Discuss.

Relaxing our mind has been a vital part of spending our free time for thousands of years. Most people find relaxing activities like reading a book while others love to stay in the park, just [watch] a boring TV channel or discuss {"discuss" needs an object - maybe "discuss the news of the day"} with friends in front of a cup of tea or coffee. Even if maybe some {"Although perhaps some people" sounds better} persons will not totally agree with me, I consider that two of the most important activities that should eat {"eat" has a negative connotation, so does not really work here} our free time are the reading of a book and outdoor activities with family or friends. {ok, but "are reading books and enjoying outdoor …" sounds better}

Reading has always been one of the activities that fascinated the human mind and as long as we read books written in a language that we do not find difficult to understand, we should find {these "finds" here sound repetitive} reading a relaxing activity. Of course, as long as the books we are reading are not too technical to make us realize that we are not reading for fun but for study.{this is not a complete sentence - add "this is true" before "as long"} {also, the last phrase is a little confusing} For example I remember when my sister told me that by reading for relaxation she found God and that changed her life. She was reading mostly religious books. {this example is a little confusing - finding God seems to be akin to developing your mind, or at least your spirit, so it seems a little opposite of just "vegging out"}

Another activity [that] I personally consider can have an important effect in our li[ves is] outdoor activities {a singular subject with a plural object sounds a little odd - maybe "is participating in outdoor activities …"} with family members or friends. Th[ese] activities {this is repetitive} will help us [stay] ingood shape for a long period of time and [at] the same time will help us develop strong close relationships with the persons{"people" is better here} we are spending our time with. And {avoid beginning sentences with "and" or "but" - here you could say "furthermore"} strong and close relationships are vital to have with people we would like to have around us for longer periods of time. For example I remember that when I was younger I [went] fishing [a lot] with my father and over the years this activity become very important for us and made ushave {"helped us have" is better} have a very special relation[ship].

In conclusion[,] spending our time [wisely] {everyone spends their time, there is no way not to!} is very important and we should have a really clear [balance] between spending some time and [just wasting] {wasting probably has too negative a connotation here, but "losing time" is incorrect} some time. I strongly believe that reading a book will help our mind and develop our vocabulary and when we have more time and [the] weather is [nice], spending some time outside with family or friends will help our relations[hips]. I just hope that [fewer and fewer] people will [place importance on] {is this what you meant?} activities like playing computer games and watch television series.

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